My black guitar leans up against my drawers and on top of my drawers there is an orange word that says Brave. I love my room because you can just sit and read and just play. So overall i think my bedroom is a wonderful place to relax and do my own thing so I wouldn't change a thing about it. A very well written and descriptive piece. It has quite a bit of mess on top of the cabinet and next to the cabinet is white and black draws which holds my books and other things and above the drawers is a colorful kite. There's flower patterns everywhere and unique designs on my furniture. Mabelles Bedroom Description Brothers Of A Feather Driving Wheel Lyrics, But at one point you said in your accessories paragraph "But they aren't dirty they are actually quite clean all thanks to my dog." However you could of used more of it like putting commas in longer sentences. 9 years ago. My bedroom I spotted a few spelling and punctuation mistakes. Now I am going to move on to my senses. The best metaphors come from the heart. So now you know about my room, I hope you can visualize it and my topics were the furniture, accessories, colors and the layout. This simile is used to describe the letters Roland and Maud find at Seal Court, in Christabel's 3-. Now I am going to move on to my furniture. I have always enjoyed my bedroom as describes the character of me, as it being a part of my life, it describes the aspects of what I like such as colours, patterns, decoration and the bedroom layout. R5. Below the small window on the left is a nice, lush white desk with a lot of my belongings lying on top. the final theme is football simply because we love football and there is football stuff everywhere that we play with in the house. Your story was good. My favorite things in my room are the pink wallpaper, the cool view outside my window because there are lots of cool trees and my bed's really comfortable because it has a soft mattress, there is also a cool windowsill that you can sit on and look at those beautiful trees. The carpet is basking in the rays of the afternoon sun. My room is not too empty but its not too full either. My bed with its wooden stand is quite tall but I dont mind it that way. Its small and cluttered, so there's no where to move. One of the styles of my bedroom is wood because most of the room is made of it and it looks really cool too. One area that you could work on is maybe not repeating things and making sure that what you say makes sense. Then your eyes are carried to my dark coloured wooden dresser underneath the back window to the left. I like how you described your mum telling you to clean your room all the time haha. Im Chris and I run this website a resource about symbolism, metaphors, idioms, and a whole lot more! My bedroom is a forest, heaps of clothes scattered on the floor is the Next time try used some words less for example the word 'and'. Posters are another thing people have in their room, in my room I have one poster of a 3D of a coral reef. I want to be out playing with my friends.. The pattern is bad, It is a circle and 2 squiggly lines that run beside it and keep doing the same thing until it reaches the roof. Or, it might be used to express how dirty the home is. My bedroom is Santa's workshop during December. Above my dresser is a medium, wooden framed mirror that sits above my dresser at head level.I often use this mirror to do my hair in the morning or put earrings in. In my room I have a book on my beside table that I am reading and I have books in my wardrobe that I have already read or need to be read. Above the irritatingly tall line of trees, the tip of Mt Hutt is just visible, its snowy peak nudging the sky. My bed is a king slat bed with black duvet sheets and black pillow cases (would like some new ones). Sometimes I play music from my bluetooth speaker and my brother comes in and screams and dances along to the music. The temperature of the room is balanced. Ok I have got a lot of things in my room but some of my favorites are the accessories. Muesli bar wrappers, food wrappers and clothes tags are a common item found on my floor. Your story was very descriptive and had good describing words. I can also take out anger when I am annoyed and I needed my drums to practice for my drum lessons. - Contact Us - Privacy Policy - Terms and Conditions, Definition and Examples of Literary Terms, Famous Metaphors from Athletes, Artists, and Authors, Top 6 Great Metaphors in Presidential Speeches, 10 Great Metaphors from Popular 2000s Songs, 10 Dramatic Uses of Apostrophe by Edgar Allan Poe, Love is a fragile flower opening to the warmth of spring, Art washes away from the soul the dust of everyday life. , All the worlds a stage, and all the men and women merely players. , All our words are but crumbs that fall down from the feast of the mind. , Let us be grateful to people who make us happy, they are the charming gardeners who make our souls blossom. , Advertising is the rattling of a stick inside a swill bucket. , Dying is a wild night and a new road. , Fill your paper with the breathings of your heart. . I stroll into my room and the bright colours instantly pop out. Your vocabulary was really good, you used nouns and adjectives well. My bed is the main accessory in my room because it is in the center of the room up against my feature wall. LEARNING WITH MRS STAPLES@ MT HUTT COLLEGE, METHVEN. 4-. I ventured into my room, with the sunshine streaming in. Colors are a big part in my bedroom because the colors describe who I am and what my personality is like because I am a person who prefers darker colors. On the far wall where the window is there is beautiful multi-coloured painting of a cow and in the right hand wall there is a small built in wardrobe with a mirror on one of the doors and on the other there is the same deep sea green as on my feature wall. Very well written i liked the word choices and how you alborated on it, there was nothing that I could find that needed work i would give you a 4+, Very good way of describing room. The layout of my bedroom is great but i dont like it. My room is not the most spectacular, but it is the one place that I can call my own. You've likely heard many primary metaphors throughout the course of your life and studies. Next to my desk is a black and white Beanbag chair where I sit when Im either reading or watching Netflix. Or, it is a metaphor that could be used if you have just cooked a big messy meal and turned around to see that there is flour and vegetable scraps and plates and bowls all over the counter. Lots of mess, piles and piles. Grade rating 4, your editing was really really good i could not see anything misspell or no comma or anything so well well done. The colour and brightness are perfect in mostly every way possible. You have some great ideas and I can get a really good visualisation of your room. I work my way through the chaos and reach my bed. Secondly the lighting, at four oclock my room is almost pitch black and its so damp and cold. The cleanliness of my room is great but with a small amount of clothes on the ground. Next to my bed is a deyou miterfire. If you go into My room you will probably think it's really big and very messy, and the first thing you will see is the pink wallpaper and the rips and sellotape on the walls. there was only just a few full stops being misplaced but overall it was really great. Well I think it's there to get a good view of our old house, right next door! But one thing that does make it dirty is my bird Percy, he leaves his seeds all over the floor and makes it the messiest. With the pastel colours and gold coloured curtains, it gives the room a lot of light. If were tired, then R.I.P floor, your burial is in progress. You used a lot of good descriptive words to express your bedroom. Old knick knacks made of glass and metal dotted around to add a more homely feel. 3, You did spell some difficult words. The first one is of peppers that I painted at Lauriston in year 4, that was the one that got ripped off the wall. Sometimes when it's really cold i'll have my soft red blanket as well. I have separated the metaphors on this page into two lists. Under my bed is my large curved desk that has been bolted to the ladder, and then my tiny wardrobe which I can barely fit all my clothes into. Theirs the unbearable feeling of not being able to find anything and always having to resort to yesterday's old grungy smelly shirt that you chucked on the floor after you got home the day before, or just having to use week old socks by spraying deodorant on them so they don't smell bad because you seemed to have misplaced every other pair. My bed it doesn't get made and the sheet is on the floor. My bedroom is down the hallway of our house on your left. Another metaphor that could be used is, " The bedroom is so messy, it looks like a war zone." My bedroom is bright like the sun. What is walking dictionary a simile or a metaphor? What is a metaphor for a metaphor? A metaphor for a metaphor?! A1: there isn't such thing it is just called a metaphor. A2: Alfred Jarry called it a pataphor An excellent description of your room Meg. I think it is awesome you describe things in you bedroom so well and I saw it so clear in my head. Above my bed are two medium sized paintings, one of an owl and the other of a tree. The mirror is directly in line with my bed so it was scary when I had just watched a horror movie about the urban legend Bloody Mary and had to go to sleep. I like it because it has all my precious stuff. On one side is a white metal pole and on the other is a white wooden slab to keep the desk up and stable. I feel happy and comfortable in my bedroom, I wouldnt change my room but I wouldnt mind a double bed though. A normal room for a 13 year old. Really good George, there were no spelling mistakes I could see. Emma I like how consistent you are on your punctuation's It is good how you used them. I hear it as push all your cloths under your bed and chuck them in your wardrobe. The color of the carpet is a dark grey which goes with the furniture and the color of the walls. I have two colours in my room. JESS'S BEDROOM DESCRIPTION I like all of my bits and bobs in my room because that is what makes it mine. But I would like to get rid of the hole and change the wallpaper, also I want a tv. I have no clothes draws sitting around in my room because my wardrobe is large enough to store everything in. Before long, the divide between work and home is blurred, and you can even metaphorically call your home a workplace because they appear so similar. Cartoon drawings load the wall that I've drawn in my spare time, the weekends for a hobby. Keep up the good work. Then, you can say your home is a zoo (or a swamp or a classroom, or whatever!) When you walk into my room you will see famous NBA (National Basketball Administration) players, such as Kobe Bryant, Michael Jordan and Allen Iverson it's like my gold to my treasure box. You used the write amount of good words in the right places. I adore my paintings and the way that they match my theme of turquoise blue. I share my bedroom with my one year old brother Walter and I manage to keep it reasonably tidy. I wouldnt mind a bigger bed, though! My duvet has white and pink checkers on it, ontop of that I have a small blue blanket with symmetrical squares on it. Every room has accessories, even if it isnt a bedroom. It use to be an old garage but was renovated into a bedroom that Im proud to call it mine. There's pictures everywhere, bright jewelry, and so many perfumes on my duchess. Describe The Room Your In Describe the room you are in Dark, empty and cool; I gaze ahead at the room before me, with only the sound of the air conditioner thrumming. My bedroom is somewhere that I regularly spend time. I dont really have any toys, My room has a lot of matching colors because my room is a modern color. You're spelling was really great, I don't think I found a single error. The layout of my room is made so everything can fit. The set up in my room. Its mine and I like it the way it is. (He is messy.) But there are some things that I would really like to change like my bed would be better if it was double size and maybe a little bit of colour on my walls would make it much better. You just need to open up your curtains more to get the better light. The style of my room is a beach theme. Over all it was still one of your best work. They are also a good way to annoy everyone in the house and wake them up when I want to. I love the use of your vocabulary e.g chaos. You could work on the adjectives but otherwise very good. One of my relaxed comfortable places. My wardrobe is a double sliding door with a grey color. There are three brass coloured wall lamps scattered around the room that have been pulled out their sockets and painted under, there are small clusters of hooks and hangers ready for decoration like a wonderful poster and a few of my creations from school. My pillow is softer than a cloud and feels like a giant marshmallow. All of the furniture is pretty old for example the punk bed is about five years old and the dresser is about eight but its still in good condition. I like my room because it's got enough space for all my stuff like my table for doing homework and my spare bed for if I have any friends come over. Bunkhouse Western Fabric, I would give you a 3. I enjoyed reading your writing illustrates without hesitation what your room feels and looks like. There isn't really a theme to it. Relevance. Two walls are a normal bland cream, but the other walls are a bright tropical turquoise, But it surprisingly works! There are so many aspects of my bed I love but my favorite one would have to how comfortable it is. I really like the words you have used to describe your story like To call your home a dump is to say that its a complete mess! I would probably just proofread your work before submitting it. Flagstone Cost Per Pallet, My bedroom supplies a marvellous view. I have a globe lamp on top of my chest of drawers but the bulb in it broke so its all taken apart, sitting next to it is my 3D colosseum puzzle. You have got great vocabulary, I didn't really see anything that wrong. I think my bedroom is amazing but still has a bit of work to be done on it for it to be a masterpiece! So, if you referred to your home as a retreat, you would be saying that your home is a peaceful place to escape from the world belong. On my shelf there are wooden airplanes that I have designed and made with my granddad that can tell you I like woodwork. I would say that the overall style of my bedroom is light and modern. Im looking at my animal pillows and paying attention to the detail, their touch is soft like a piece of silk and the zip that's holding the stuffing in the zip is sharp and has a cold feeling. My room is upstairs so as soon as you walk up the stairs you are in my room. I also have a desk and chair next to my big window. The bright red walls grab you attention straight away. I would really like to move things around,like move my desk away from my bed (so I don't always knock my head on the corner), and move everything against the wall so I can do wacky things with mo.re space in the centre of my room, although I would have to actually clean it once in awhile. Im going to tell you four things about my room, the layout, accessories, colours and finally the style of the room. Moving on from the layout of my bedroom to the layout of my walls. Next to that is a deceptive worktop. By Angus Stewart, I like how you have clearly stated your paragraphs. I am proud of this layout, despite the occasional spots of untidiness. There is a leather chest that I dump all my clothes on, and a bunch of tools and motorbike gear in the gray shelving unit. The layout of my room is all over the place. Your email address will not be published. I like how you used brackets and capital letters to make words stand out, Your Spelling is good Molly. For me and my sisters to fit in our room the room has to be laid out a specific way, but it is pretty comfy. Its a blue 3 person couch with blue, red, and green lines all [around the couch and it unfolds into a king size bed when unfolded. Overall I am hoping my parents will be convinced that my room needs a change like some new sheets on my bed, some colour on the wall and to get rid of that useless desk. Expand on your punctuation so your not using the classics to much. When you walk in, on the left is a window and a desk, straight forward is a gigantic, wide window and to the right is my bed, wardrobe and heater. I spend probably 12 hours a day on my bed so it needs to be nice and comfy luckily it is. It's Romeo's line about his inamorata: "Juliet is the sun." In the future I would love to have my own room so I can design it the way I want it to be. I have a small sized mat black H stuck to my wall with a pattern of turquoise and white dots and black and white dot bunting underneath. On my far side wall I have a bright red clipboard with flowers on it, on the clipboard I have many pictures of my family, friends and me. No i have to go and clean up my room. The final piece of furniture your eyes get drawn to is my bed. It is filled with different kinds of art, photos and bedding. In your writing I have noticed that you need to improve the proper use of functuation. If your home was a classroom, you might imagine that you learned a lot around the house. I am going to take you on a virtual expedition through my bedroom. Brown that stands out because of the shine. Thank you so much for cleaning it this weekend Colt!!! Looking a bit further up you can see a sky light, the plastic that covers it from the reflective tube in the attic isnt fastened properly so if somebody slams a door somewhere it vibrates and makes such a commotion. Good story I enjoyed reading it. My big white, tall bookshelf is next to the window. It is the most modern part of my entire house because it has recently been renovated from the garage that was never used. 3+. This layout works really well for me. There is also a collection of photographs Ive taken in both Australia and New Zealand which is great because this ties together my two main cultures, these photos are surrendering my window and hanging above my desk. 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